Editing ...
... Man, I'm startin' to hate this word!
So far, i finished the editing on the German version (for now). What's left to do is, transferring the changes to English. I started doing that and am now at chapter 3. I will update it here when its finished, plus I'll give you a summary of the changes, so you wouldn't need to re-read everything.
See ya!
Gosh, i finally finished it ...
Most of the changes that i made were about grammar and for aesthetic purpose, to make it all easier to read and better to understand. But i also added some additional information here and there (mostly more info about the looks and background of my characters, to give them more personality and to respond to the critique that they are hard to visualize) I summarized the most important things, so you don't need to read all of it again. So here it comes ...
Stuff, that you didn't know:
-The Prologue gives more insight on the World now. (Its not that long, so its probably easier for you to read it, then for me to explain.)
-Alina normally wears slightly seductive clothing.
-During testing periods, the testers wear special clothing, that is designed to make it easier to connect the People to the U.T.O.P.I.A. Engine.
-Professor Moldwood worked for a Sleep-research institute before. Now his job is to ensure the safety of the testers during the tests.
-Raul is quite social, but hard to talk to when it comes to discuss something complex. He has a weird way to see possession. Ha can haggle for a while for some trivial thing, and give up on it shortly after that.
-Lindsay often wears Retro clothes, which makes her look old fashioned, in a stylish way. She is also a perfectionist.
-Sammy has a rebellious Nature, which is reflected in his clothing stile. He also alway says what he is thinking.
-Martha is corpulent in figure. She chooses comfortable clothes over style, but still menages to look good in them.
-Collin tends to shabby clothing. Some see him as an irresponsible child with questionable hygiene, but he is also kind-hearted and determined to reach his goals.
-Gerald is about 40 years old, he mostly wears Retro-like clothes. He calls himself a freelancer and takes every opportunity to get on stage - he even played at subway stations for a while. Due to his calm Character, he may seem disinterested in most things, but that's not true. He actually likes to debate current Events.
-Marcell mostly wears simple but modern clothes, on special occasions he tends to be more extravagant. He enjoys a good conversation, but always tries to be the lead-talker. He hangs around with Gerald a lot.
-Ellisons serious expression and the strict look my be a bit scary at first, but under the hard shell, she is a cheerful person, with a healthy sense for sarcasm.
-Debora seems to repress some kind of trauma with her cheerful character. Her short, petite figure and the colorful clothes fits her childish personality.
-In Chapter 7 the explanations of Mr. Matsugami and the Professor are transfered to the other testers in their rooms in real-time. This way everyone gets the same information. (for correcting a small plot-hole)
Honestly, I'm so tired of reading the same chapters over, and over, and over again! If i don't make any progress soon, I'll get sick of my own story!
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Update ... 2 weeks later -.- ...
Gosh, i finally finished it ...
Most of the changes that i made were about grammar and for aesthetic purpose, to make it all easier to read and better to understand. But i also added some additional information here and there (mostly more info about the looks and background of my characters, to give them more personality and to respond to the critique that they are hard to visualize) I summarized the most important things, so you don't need to read all of it again. So here it comes ...
Stuff, that you didn't know:
-The Prologue gives more insight on the World now. (Its not that long, so its probably easier for you to read it, then for me to explain.)
-Alina normally wears slightly seductive clothing.
-During testing periods, the testers wear special clothing, that is designed to make it easier to connect the People to the U.T.O.P.I.A. Engine.
-Professor Moldwood worked for a Sleep-research institute before. Now his job is to ensure the safety of the testers during the tests.
-Raul is quite social, but hard to talk to when it comes to discuss something complex. He has a weird way to see possession. Ha can haggle for a while for some trivial thing, and give up on it shortly after that.
-Lindsay often wears Retro clothes, which makes her look old fashioned, in a stylish way. She is also a perfectionist.
-Sammy has a rebellious Nature, which is reflected in his clothing stile. He also alway says what he is thinking.
-Martha is corpulent in figure. She chooses comfortable clothes over style, but still menages to look good in them.
-Collin tends to shabby clothing. Some see him as an irresponsible child with questionable hygiene, but he is also kind-hearted and determined to reach his goals.
-Gerald is about 40 years old, he mostly wears Retro-like clothes. He calls himself a freelancer and takes every opportunity to get on stage - he even played at subway stations for a while. Due to his calm Character, he may seem disinterested in most things, but that's not true. He actually likes to debate current Events.
-Marcell mostly wears simple but modern clothes, on special occasions he tends to be more extravagant. He enjoys a good conversation, but always tries to be the lead-talker. He hangs around with Gerald a lot.
-Ellisons serious expression and the strict look my be a bit scary at first, but under the hard shell, she is a cheerful person, with a healthy sense for sarcasm.
-Debora seems to repress some kind of trauma with her cheerful character. Her short, petite figure and the colorful clothes fits her childish personality.
-In Chapter 7 the explanations of Mr. Matsugami and the Professor are transfered to the other testers in their rooms in real-time. This way everyone gets the same information. (for correcting a small plot-hole)
Honestly, I'm so tired of reading the same chapters over, and over, and over again! If i don't make any progress soon, I'll get sick of my own story!
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